Reviewing Initial Comps

On Wednesday Feb. 1, the class presents their initial comps with complete graphics in 10 x 21.5 size.  Everyone looked over every one's work and then reviewed what was working and what was wrong with these comps. With our work (Airport Body Scans) the con comp (the man in the radiation suit with the women saying "have a great day at work, honey") had some problems:

• image: too big for the frame.  It needs to be smaller. 
• image (woman): too odd-looking.  The hair need to be fixed in way that isn't see through.
• Headline: the leading is too heavy, the position is awkward.

The pro comp (Rows and rows of eggs that stop with one egg cracked open with the york spilled out) was alright.  The main problem was the headline: only takes one to spoil the trip. That needs to be reworked (either rephrased or come up with a different headline).  The body copy seemed to be fine in both comps although they are kind of long.  Some editing should possibly be done to make them shorter (just have the most necessary points to the issue should be discussion).  A lot of work is ahead for us.

All in all, the critique didn't go as bad as I thought.  I always feel uncomfortable during these kinds of discussion (even when it's not my work people are looking at) but it is a necessary part of critiquing work.  If someone doesn't view it or have absolute anything to say about it, that can't be good, right?  The whole purpose of reviewing is to point out mistakes or items that could be better in order to have your work be presented completely done with everything it needs to say.